Clinton Road, West Milford, New Jersey © Google Maps
The spooky stories about Clinton Road set me thinking about :
Unlucky Roads
‘Charlie – see this news item about ‘unlucky roads ‘
‘Rosie, its hokum, I’m a journalist. Mysterious car crashes, hauntings – all ridiculous – unlucky is a myth.’
‘What about your dad’s fatal car crash ?’
‘That’s different. Police said unknown causes, no other car involved. He’s always haunted me in his way. I can still hear his cruel voice in my head mocking me, saying..’.you a writer ? What a joke, ha ha. I loved your brother best, you weren’t wanted, you’re stupid…’
‘Charlie your face is ashen, you’re sweating, are you OK ?’
‘Rosie – my chest hurts…….I ……..can’t breathe………….’
‘Charlie stay with me, it’s your heart…….help, get me Emergency Services .’
March 6, 2018 at 12:05 am
Tense and believable. Well done.
March 6, 2018 at 9:23 am
Thank you – glad you find it believable- that’s what I was aiming for.
March 5, 2018 at 9:36 pm
Excellently put together. An interesting and great take on the prompt.
March 5, 2018 at 6:15 pm
Oh! Dad’s revenge? Or just the stress of life and living under Dad’s criticism. Nice one. Keeps us guessing.
March 5, 2018 at 5:44 pm
Don’t have to be on the road for it to curse and haunt you, apparently. That was well done, Francine.
March 5, 2018 at 5:53 pm
Thanks Dale. True, a road was only a part of the story.
March 5, 2018 at 5:55 pm
Indeed. Really well done.
March 5, 2018 at 3:53 pm
Powerful story, Francine. Astonishing how parental criticism can damage people, even to the extent of causing premature death. Charlie’s father’s mockery of his aspiration to be a writer must have cut very deep.
March 5, 2018 at 5:42 pm
Thank you Penny. Your observations make total sense. I was imagining a different kind of ‘haunting’.
March 5, 2018 at 2:04 pm
Every writers’ curse – that critique Dad, back from the grave.
March 5, 2018 at 5:43 pm
Think you’re right Kelvin – why it’s hard being a writer !
March 5, 2018 at 11:04 am
Dear Francine,
Too close for coincidence? I’ll bet he’s having second thoughts about unlucky roads. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
March 5, 2018 at 5:46 pm
Thanks Rochelle, some people think there is no such thing as coincidence, don’t they. I’m undecided.
March 5, 2018 at 7:36 am
I can’t help thinking he sabotaged his dad’s car and now his dad’s haunting him… nice one!
March 5, 2018 at 5:47 pm
Ooh that’s a creepy thought, guess there was no love lost between them ?
March 4, 2018 at 9:02 pm
Oh no, his dad cursed him in life, did he curse him into death? Great to see you on Pegman, Francine!
March 5, 2018 at 5:50 pm
Its great to be on Pegman – I love visiting places – good for the imagination.
March 5, 2018 at 6:33 pm
You like visiting them virtually and in person!