Rochelle’s Friday Fictioneers challenge this week is prompted by Dale’s intriguing photo.
CUTTING IT FINE
Aaron moved from one foot to another, a lone figure illuminated in the darkness by the park light. ‘Where was Aisha ? Their coach was leaving at 4 a.m, she was cutting it fine.’ His mind churned with their painstaking debates, would a mixed marriage work, he Jewish, she Muslim ? His true loyalty lay with his mother, his deepest love was for Aisha his soulmate. They’d agreed to start a new life in the city.
Aaron watched her approaching him.
Aisha said ” Aaron I have to tell you I’ve changed my mind. I’m devastated but my family would never accept us.”
October 8, 2019 at 12:49 pm
Awww, now I’m sad! Sometimes one has to risk losing family and friends if one is to be true and authentic. I’ve personally taken that risk and it worked for me.
Effective writing, Francine, with a great deal of pathos.
October 9, 2019 at 7:58 am
Thanks for your heartfelt comment Penny. It takes courage to take such a risk. I’m glad it all worked out.
October 7, 2019 at 1:05 am
I guess the preferred outcome of this story would depend on the lifestyles the couple wanted to live. A complicated situation for sure.
October 7, 2019 at 3:29 pm
Thanks so much for your comment.
October 7, 2019 at 5:32 pm
You’re welcome.
October 6, 2019 at 10:20 pm
Well done, excellent storytelling.
October 7, 2019 at 3:35 pm
Thanks Linda, I’m so pleased you liked the story.
October 5, 2019 at 5:08 pm
A story of our times Francine. Sad but true. Well written.
October 7, 2019 at 3:37 pm
Thanks for your comment, I’m glad you liked the story.
October 5, 2019 at 12:18 am
This is such a sad reality for many. My son is dating a Muslim girl who can’t even introduce him to her folks. One would hope in this day and age these things would not still be so…especially in Canada and the States.
October 7, 2019 at 3:41 pm
Thanks Dale, I agree with you, it is a sad reality, hard for your son and his girlfriend. I wonder what would help to change cultural attitudes ?
October 7, 2019 at 4:35 pm
I don’t know. Some are beyond bull-headed
October 4, 2019 at 1:41 pm
Dear Francine,
It’s hard not to have mixed feelings about this one. I’d say if they’d gone through with it, they’d face some tough hurdles. I doubt either family would accept them. Cultural differences are challenges (this I speak from experience)…I think Aisha has made a wide choice. Still sad and disappointing for those of us who enjoy a happily ever after story. Evocative and well written.
Shalom,
Rochelle
October 7, 2019 at 3:44 pm
Thank you Rochelle, I appreciate your reflections. A happy ending would be heart warming but sadly not so likely. Tough for the two people involved.
October 4, 2019 at 12:50 pm
Smack in the face real! How often this type of meeting occurs. Good take on the prompt.
October 7, 2019 at 3:45 pm
Thanks for your comment, much appreciated, so glad you liked the story.
October 3, 2019 at 7:19 pm
Oh. But that’s honest. 🙂
October 4, 2019 at 9:04 am
Thanks for comment Crispina – it not the happily ever after ending for sure.
October 4, 2019 at 10:48 am
and how often is life happy ever after?
October 3, 2019 at 7:03 pm
I guess that answers Aaron’s question for him…
October 4, 2019 at 9:08 am
Appreciate your comment Iain – I imagine that whatever choices they made would bring challenges.
October 3, 2019 at 7:02 pm
Probably it’s best if people marry people. Thought-provoking story
October 4, 2019 at 9:14 am
Thanks for your comment Neil, much appreciated. Glad you found it thought provoking.
October 3, 2019 at 6:38 pm
Aw, boo 🙁 I was hoping for a happy ending. But I’m sure Aaron deserves someone who will put him first.
October 4, 2019 at 9:23 am
Thanks Ali, definitely not a happy ending. I appreciate your comment.