photo prompt Danny Bowman https://rochellewisoff.com/2017/09/06/8-september-2017/
Rochelle’s photo this week is an atmospheric moorland path, underneath a dark and looming sky.
Here’s my story :
The Lonely Path
by francineangelcakes
” I gotta meet Jo, I’m so scared, everything’s different now after the Big Disaster. Jo’s good he’s my friend, he’ll make things OK. Don’t know where he is, haven’t seen him in a while. Ten years ago we made a pact, to meet here on this hilltop – our special place. No-one comes here so we’ll be safe. The sky is so dark, hard to see clearly. What will I do if Jo doesn’t come ? Wait…wait – something moved over there…no…yes ! A beam of light ahead, is it Jo ?
September 11, 2017 at 9:56 am
Nicely unsettling. Great pacing, giving the history and inner-turmoil. Well done.
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September 11, 2017 at 12:44 pm
Thank you for your feedback, I appreciate that. Think the mood grew out of me deciding the situation was post apocalyptic !
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September 10, 2017 at 3:40 pm
Could be, maybe–maybe not–great job of leaving your readers wanting more 🙂
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September 10, 2017 at 5:20 pm
Thanks for your comment – glad you like the ending.
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September 8, 2017 at 12:49 pm
Is it? What a great open ending.
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September 9, 2017 at 6:40 am
Thank you for you comment – glad you liked the ending – I did think about making it happy for Jo…
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September 8, 2017 at 12:41 pm
I sense a bit of Z for Zechariah here in this story. Well done.
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September 9, 2017 at 6:57 am
You are right – definitely a Post Apocalyptic mood.
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September 8, 2017 at 7:03 am
One of my favourites this week.
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September 8, 2017 at 9:00 am
Thank you, appreciate your comment.
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September 8, 2017 at 3:38 am
Ten years is a long time…will it be Jo? She’s got a lot of faith. 🙂
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September 8, 2017 at 9:01 am
Yes – ten years is a long time- I wanted to build up the tension…
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September 7, 2017 at 7:00 pm
I hope it is Jo and not something sinister. Great voice.
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September 8, 2017 at 9:02 am
Thank you for your comment, much appreciated.
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