photo courtesy of Dale Rogerson
Rochelle’s 100 word story challenge this week is prompted by a photo full of possibilities.
Here’s my story.
ALL IN THE MIND
The silver shimmer merges with the soft rays of the morning sun, wreathes around the half open window. Summoned to this household. Grace turns over in bed, stirred by the ripple of her curtain, a passing silver light. The pang of her loss invades her again. Dear brother, disappeared. No messages, no future happiness without him.
Downstairs, Persephone makes breakfast. Smiles at the new presence beside her. Her powers still work.
‘Anniversary of your brother’s disappearance Grace. If he were here now what would you say to him ?’
‘Luke, I forgive you with all my heart.’
Unnoticed the silver light melts and is gone.
August 10, 2018 at 11:03 pm
Beautifully written and the melting at the end was cool (no pun intended)
August 11, 2018 at 10:11 am
Thank you – so glad you liked the story.
August 11, 2018 at 11:46 am
July 23, 2018 at 3:37 pm
Ah, a lovely story beautifully written. Clever title too.
July 26, 2018 at 7:35 pm
Thanks Jilly, so glad you liked the story.
July 23, 2018 at 3:02 pm
July 26, 2018 at 7:40 pm
Thanks so much Lisarey. Appreciate your feedback.
July 21, 2018 at 7:37 pm
A ghost story with what I’m hoping is a happy ending. Forgiveness has freed his spirit.
July 22, 2018 at 8:00 am
Thank you Granonine. Glad you liked the story.
July 21, 2018 at 5:32 pm
This was indeed beautifully and lovingly done, Francine.
July 21, 2018 at 7:06 pm
Thank you Dale, I’m so glad you liked the story.
July 21, 2018 at 10:53 am
Nuanced and ethereal story, full of love. Nicely done.
July 21, 2018 at 11:03 am
Thanks so much Rochelle – pleased you liked the story.
July 20, 2018 at 11:44 pm
Releasing a ghost? Love the silver shimmer essence.
July 21, 2018 at 10:32 am
Thanks for your feedback.
July 20, 2018 at 10:55 pm
Ahh he was listening. Good work.
July 21, 2018 at 10:32 am
Thanks – pleased you liked the story.
July 20, 2018 at 3:46 pm
He’s there with her. Lovely story!
July 20, 2018 at 3:50 pm
Thank you Ali – pleased you liked the story. Yes, they are together now.
July 20, 2018 at 3:20 pm
Magically told. Like Penny, I liked the choice of name
July 20, 2018 at 3:45 pm
Thanks very much Neil, so glad you liked the story. I was hoping that the name Persephone would hint at the underworld as a destination of the brother.
July 20, 2018 at 2:34 pm
A sunny story full of empathy.
July 20, 2018 at 3:51 pm
Thank you – so glad you liked it.
July 20, 2018 at 2:32 pm
You use lovely imagery to represent Grace’s brother. I love the very gentle way you deal with the reconciliation in Grace’s mind. And what a clever choice of name for the woman who brings about Grace’s healing – Persephone, queen of the underworld. Lovely story altogether, Francine
July 20, 2018 at 4:03 pm
Thanks so much Penny for your feedback, pleased you liked the story. I think that someone can find peace through an acknowledgement, even if the recipient is not there.
July 20, 2018 at 4:32 pm
Yes, I agree. Letting go of anger – forgiving people who have harmed us – is a big step towards good mental health.