CLICK to enter inLinkzThanks to dear Rochelle for hosting Friday Fictioneers and to Penny for the photo.HOMESean strode along the familiar path lost in troubled thought about his London building site job.He stopped at the little pool – its crystal clear water, revealing the dark streak the colour of of stacked peat.
One look at the pool jolted him back to his Kerry wild and beautiful, full of the echoes of people he used to know. Those untamed gorse moors, those fat dairy cows took him straight back the Kerry in his bloodstream, and it hurt.
‘Why did I leave ?’ he asked himself, at once knowing the answer.
September 7, 2021 at 1:09 am
Wonderfully written, Francine. His pain is palpable…
September 7, 2021 at 2:03 pm
Thanks so much Dale, glad you liked the story.
September 7, 2021 at 2:37 pm
I did!
September 6, 2021 at 9:35 am
Dear Francine,
Sean’s longing is tangible. The last line leaves us wanting more. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
September 6, 2021 at 6:37 pm
Thanks so much Rochelle, I’m pleased you liked the story.
September 4, 2021 at 9:35 pm
I can feel the ache in Sean, his world in flux, missing his loved one. The color of the water reflects the soiled aspect of his memory. Well done!
September 5, 2021 at 7:08 pm
Thanks so much Jade, glad you liked the story.
September 5, 2021 at 9:30 pm
You’re very welcome.
September 4, 2021 at 5:29 pm
There’s depth to this character that is hard to achieve in 100 words. Well done! I loved your take on my photo, too.
September 5, 2021 at 7:17 pm
Thanks so much Penny, I’m pleased you like the direction that your photo took me. It was the peat / dark brown earth colour.
September 4, 2021 at 10:26 am
The story makes me feel for him. This is a feeling many people must feel these days, being far away from the place they love, forcefully or deliberate.
September 5, 2021 at 7:25 pm
Thanks so much Gabi. Guess there are many people these days who are far from home.
September 4, 2021 at 4:24 am
We carry pieces of our “homes” with us; triggers send us back, wondering why we wandered.
September 6, 2021 at 6:48 pm
Thanks Lorraine, an interesting reflection.
September 3, 2021 at 9:36 pm
Swapping Kerry for London. Must have been a very good reason.
September 6, 2021 at 6:56 pm
Thanks Ali. I was thinking about all those Irish people who came to England to work because there wasn’t any back home.
September 3, 2021 at 9:30 pm
Great take on the prompt.
September 6, 2021 at 7:01 pm
Thanks very much for your comment.
September 3, 2021 at 2:11 pm
What was the answer? Was there a hint which I miss? I need more.
September 3, 2021 at 2:10 pm
What was the answer? Is there a hint that I missed. I need more.
September 2, 2021 at 4:56 pm
Lovely! Well done. Love the photo too!
September 6, 2021 at 7:06 pm
Thanks Holly.
September 2, 2021 at 4:34 pm
An evocative portrait. I like the peat reference particularly
September 6, 2021 at 7:09 pm
Thank you Neil. Glad you liked the peat reference. The peat coloured streak in the photo set me off.