Pegman takes us to San Ignacio, in Bolivia this week. The challenge is to write a 150 word story, inspired by the photo. Here’s mine.
‘C’mon Bro’s, let’s catch this city Low Life. Forget the harvest. This cheat has brought dishonour for our sister Mendia, he’s spat upon our family’s honour. Promised to marry her then ran off.’
Fredo – ‘Lets’ try Santa Cruz…’
Angelo – ‘Stupid idea, our old car won’t make it’.
Alejandra – ‘ Are we going to kill him ? No? Make him marry Mendia ? ‘
Fredo – ‘ Try this dirt road to the lake.’
Hey – what’s happened here ? Swerved tyre tracks in the dirt, right up to the water’s edge…
Car abandoned.. doors flung open. Smell of hot metal – been here a while.
Look in the car … Any blood ? Bullet holes ?
Here’s a wallet, got Low Life’s I.D card, no money. Maybe a robbery, drug related ?
There’s gloves on the back seat, dark red stains on them, an empty cartridge case on the floor.
He has disappeared. Oh well, duty done, let’s go for a beer.
May 22, 2018 at 6:38 pm
Chaos in their agreement that something must be done but not organised enough to do what must in the name of “honour”. Lucky for them, something happened to take care of the situation…
This was a fun read.
May 22, 2018 at 7:34 pm
So glad you enjoyed the story- you’re right, they’re sort amateur in their approach !
May 22, 2018 at 9:25 pm
May 22, 2018 at 5:09 pm
That’s great. So much unsaid comes across in the dialogue. Love how the characters disregard what the others have said–and even what happened to some degree.
May 22, 2018 at 5:28 pm
Thank you Karen- so glad you liked the dialogue- I was aiming for a bunch of brothers sort of jostling amongst themselves.
May 22, 2018 at 3:52 pm
A good take on the prompt. I like the way you show how limited and limiting the Hispanic culture of machismo is.
May 22, 2018 at 5:30 pm
Thank you Penny, appreciate your feedback, pleased you liked the take on Hispanic culture.