Rochelle’s prompt this week is a scene of sunlit canals, quiet streets. Perhaps a backwater behind the busy centre of Venice ? Here is my 100 word story.
LOST AND FOUND
I merge into the waves of people, shift into the shadow of an unlit empty canal, rank smelling, flotsam drifting on the dark water.
I am human flotsam, drawn to a current that can suck me down into oblivion. She threw me away, unwanted. I fled to this haunting city to hide in the blur of people here.
Down a side street I notice a café. The owner smiles at me and through her open door wafts the warm sweet aroma of tomatoes, herbs, meat. I feel suddenly famished. She invites me in, my whole being softens. I am welcome here.
June 26, 2018 at 1:16 pm
Wonderful atmosphere, and a happy ending. Perfect.
June 26, 2018 at 7:20 pm
Thank you – so pleased you enjoyed the story.
June 26, 2018 at 11:09 am
Oh the smell of that food! I’m glad he feels invited and more than mere flotsam at the end.
June 26, 2018 at 7:27 pm
Thanks Fatima, pleased you liked the way the story ended.
June 25, 2018 at 3:28 pm
Interesting and clever way to write about the photo prompt. I could smell the scent from the cafe
in your description. Nicely done …
June 25, 2018 at 8:25 pm
Thank you so much Isadora, for your feedback . Pleased you liked the story.
June 24, 2018 at 5:58 pm
A welcoming place, the smell and warmth can make all the difference. Nice take on the prompt
June 25, 2018 at 8:27 pm
Thank you Michael, glad you liked the story. Just drawing on experience I think smell and warmth can cut through despair, I agree with you.
June 23, 2018 at 2:17 pm
Your story captures that moment when your narrator suddenly realises they have recovered. I love the way you show this with the delicious smell of food, and the warmth of a smile!
June 25, 2018 at 8:29 pm
Thanks for your kind feedback Penny. Pleased you liked the story…think kindness is healing don’t you.
June 23, 2018 at 8:28 am
Lovely story – and who knows who is serving the food in that inviting restaurant?
June 25, 2018 at 8:31 pm
So glad you liked the story Jilly. Good point – who is serving the food ? Chapter Two of the story ?
June 22, 2018 at 10:27 pm
to hide in the blur of people This line says so much A transition between the bleak beginning of your story and the inviting end.
June 25, 2018 at 8:34 pm
Thank Alicia, appreciate your feedback. When I started writing, I wasn’t sure about how it would end. Kindness prevailed.
June 22, 2018 at 3:03 pm
Lovely human tale. Beautifully crafted.
June 25, 2018 at 8:35 pm
Thank you for you appreciative feedback.
June 25, 2018 at 8:36 pm
Thank you for your feedback, glad you liked it.
June 22, 2018 at 10:25 am
You captured so much emotion in a few words. Not only emotions, your story appeals to the senses, warmth and sent. Well done.
June 25, 2018 at 8:38 pm
Thank you for your appreciative feedback – so glad you liked the story. I wanted to write a ‘sort of ‘ poem.
June 21, 2018 at 9:24 pm
What a lovely, emotional turn around there – from hunted outsider to welcome guest in a few seconds. Well done
June 25, 2018 at 8:39 pm
Thanks so much Lynne for your feedback, much appreciated, Glad you liked the story
June 21, 2018 at 9:04 pm
What beautiful imagery and an equally beautiful story.
June 25, 2018 at 8:41 pm
Thank you Jelli, appreciate your feedback, glad you liked the story.
June 21, 2018 at 5:10 pm
Lovely, a refuge amongst the foul smells and teeming city.
June 25, 2018 at 8:43 pm
Thank you Ali- like the way you characterise it ..refuge amongst the foul smells… appreciate your feedback.
June 21, 2018 at 4:10 pm
I liked the way you began and ended with smells, and set the change with the difference between the smells
June 21, 2018 at 3:28 pm
One woman’s “trash” is another’s treasure… Lovely take.
June 25, 2018 at 8:44 pm
Thanks for your feedback Dale, so glad you liked the story.
June 21, 2018 at 12:46 pm
A new beginning, hopefully. Delightful.
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June 21, 2018 at 3:14 pm
Thank you Keith, so glad you enjoyed the story.
June 21, 2018 at 9:20 am
This had such a nice positive feel to it.
June 21, 2018 at 3:18 pm
Thank you – I’m pleased the positive part came through. Guess it could have taken a sadder turn.
June 21, 2018 at 8:29 am
Wonderful sense of place, and a hopeful ending.
June 21, 2018 at 3:21 pm
Thank you Iain – I appreciate your feedback. Think Venice is an unusual city isn’t it ?
June 21, 2018 at 3:45 pm
I have only spent one day there, it is certainly unique – one thing I always remember is stepping out the train station and immediately the lack of car engine noise hit me!