https://rochellewisoff.com/2018/01/24/26-january-2018/Rochelle’s challenge this week is to write 100 words inspired by the photo prompt of a derelict building that’s seen better days. does it have any future ? Read on….
photo courtesy of Sandra Crook
Cash Flow
‘ Hey, Sy, we just drove past that smashed up house. I read about it. Story was that crooks rammed their truck into the wall, to steal the ATM machine. Owner just walked away. What a wreck !’
‘OK Zak, park outside, we’ll go take a look. Waste of time though, too broken for a music venue’.
‘Come on Sy, think concept — we could make a thing of the smashed up look’.
‘You’re crazy, it’d swallow money’.
‘Think theme . Shabby chic ? Bikers’ Joint ? Call it ….Derelict Dance Hall ? Drive Inn ? Or Hole in the Wall !’
‘You’re on your own Zak, I’m going ‘.
January 30, 2018 at 2:40 pm
Zak’s probably right, he could probably make it work!
January 28, 2018 at 1:07 pm
I actually think it would work… we all love a hole in the wall place
January 28, 2018 at 3:12 pm
Thanks for your comment.
January 27, 2018 at 1:12 pm
Great story, beautifully written 🙂
January 28, 2018 at 8:36 am
Thank you – glad you liked the story.
January 27, 2018 at 9:52 am
You’ve got to love someone with ideas! (It’s my photo actually, JHC was last week, I think) 😉
January 27, 2018 at 11:12 am
Sorry Sandra, about the photo mistake. Now corrected.
January 27, 2018 at 11:13 am
No worries 🙂
January 26, 2018 at 11:00 pm
Dear Francine,
Personally, I think Zak’s onto something here. Believable dialogue. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
January 27, 2018 at 11:13 am
Thank you Rochelle. Glad the dialogue works.
January 26, 2018 at 6:06 pm
Sy’s got no sense of adventure! Go, Zak, Go!!
January 26, 2018 at 11:56 am
I think it’s a brilliant idea! Different, anyway.
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January 26, 2018 at 5:46 pm
Thanks – glad you like it.
January 26, 2018 at 3:05 am
Two distinct characters in 100 words. I admire Zak but I don’t blame Sy. Great story.
January 27, 2018 at 11:15 am
Glad you enjoyed the story. I like the challenge of 100 words.
January 25, 2018 at 8:20 pm
I’m with Zak. This could be big, something out of the ordinary 🙂
January 26, 2018 at 5:48 pm
Zak’s an optimist isn’t he ?
January 25, 2018 at 7:33 pm
If Zak goes for it anyway, I think Sy will regret not getting involved! (I’d call it Derelict Dance Hall if I was him.) 🙂
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
January 25, 2018 at 7:36 pm
Guess Zak is a risk taker ? what do you think ? The Derelict Dance Hall has a certain ring to it. Thanks for your feedback.
January 25, 2018 at 6:35 pm
I like the way you allow dialogue to tell the whole story.
January 27, 2018 at 11:16 am
Glad you liked the dialogue approach.
January 25, 2018 at 5:46 pm
I’m with Zak
January 25, 2018 at 7:38 pm
To be honest, I’m with Zak too.
January 25, 2018 at 5:41 pm
Crazier ideas have worked – I’d stick with Zak to give it a go!
January 25, 2018 at 7:40 pm
Think you’re right about crazier ideas have worked. We need the energy of dreamers.